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ImageSharon
Mar 13, 2011 3:53 PM CST
Name: Sharon
Kentucky
Do you enjoy writing short stories? Let's talk about getting ideas, finding direction, organizing thoughts. Share your short stories with us right here on this thread.

If you have questions, let's hear them. If you would like constructive criticism, then let us know that, too.
ImageSharon
Mar 31, 2011 9:53 AM CST
Name: Sharon
Kentucky
From time to time we'll have some photos here in the Short Stories thread, photos that might inspire you to write a story. Today we have a photo from Nap, take a close look at it, and if you feel a story creeping into your mind, share it with us right here on this thread!

Thanks, Nap.
Imagenap
Mar 31, 2011 10:11 AM CST
Name: Nancy
Buffalo NY
Thanks, Sharon. I felt my heart tugging when I saw these two one day last Spring. I'd love to see someone put the photo to words.

Thumb of 2011-03-31/nap/be30d4

(The photo was taken at Forest Lawn Cemetery.)
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Imagenap
Apr 10, 2011 11:15 AM CST
Name: Nancy
Buffalo NY
In another thread, Sharon, you mentioned telling a story with words.

"It really is a challenging project, trying to project a story through a minimum of images. Sometimes, depending on the photo subject, the story is right there in front of you, but often people will perceive different things, not what you intended at all. But most photos tell a story, so the challenge is making sure the photos 'talk' the way you want them to. " (Sharon)

In considering the above photo of a man and his son, who appear to be in deep contemplation, I've decided to add a few more photos taken the same day. The father has given me permission to post these photos.


Thumb of 2011-04-10/nap/63ba7b Thumb of 2011-04-10/nap/3fb6d3

Thumb of 2011-04-10/nap/0d5176 Thumb of 2011-04-10/nap/184d84

Now, is this an example? Do they tell a story? Since I want to understand the concept you are proposing, please advise honestly. Of course, my original intent was not to tell a story, just to capture a touching time between father and son.
ImageSharon
Apr 10, 2011 11:30 AM CST
Name: Sharon
Kentucky
A beautiful story, Nap.

I have company coming in the door right now. Don't let me forget later today and I'll tell you the first 'story' that entered my mind when I looked at your pictures.
Imagedahlianut
Apr 11, 2011 4:14 PM CST
Name: Dahlianut
Calgary, AB Zone 3a
O that so changes things for me with the additional photos. Nap the first photo spoke to me of a story from the Muse' perspective and what they saw in the faces of the father and son. Now it may be a different story....
Imagenap
Apr 11, 2011 5:52 PM CST
Name: Nancy
Buffalo NY
Wow, that's so interesting, dahlia. That perspective is not one that I would have thought of. But it is clear that the additional photos would change the focus. I see your point. It's about the little boy now?
ImageSharon
Apr 11, 2011 8:12 PM CST
Name: Sharon
Kentucky
I still see it from the perspective of the Three Graces. They see the little boy from their lonely spot in the middle of the lake. Each of them sees the son she'll never have, the husband who'll never love her, and they regret the wrongful act that caused the spell to be cast on them, the spell that could never be broken.

Frozen for eternity, all they can do is watch the child and long for what they cannot have.

And the little boy, with all the charming wisdom of a little one, he senses their loneliness and his heart hurts for what he doesn't know. But fickle as little children often are, he fast forgets and asks his dad:

Daddy, can I catch a goose? Please, Daddy, please?

The frightened geese turn and rush past the Three Graces, splashing them from head to toe. Just as they always did. Just as they always will do.

the end.
Imagenap
Apr 11, 2011 9:28 PM CST
Name: Nancy
Buffalo NY
Oh. Wow. What a stroyteller you are, my friend. It's perfect. I can only say thank you for giving new meaning and new life to these photos. It's magic.

Thank you, Sharon.
ImageSharon
Apr 11, 2011 9:34 PM CST
Name: Sharon
Kentucky
It's the photos that are magic, nap. You took the photos.

And they will be different for different viewers, will cause different reactions. It's the emotion the photojournalist is after, that's what she/he wants to grab. Doesn't matter what the real story is, what matters is the feeling the photos create.

And that's what your photo grouping does.
There's the magic.
Imagenap
Apr 11, 2011 9:37 PM CST
Name: Nancy
Buffalo NY
*Blush* Lovey dubby I hope the dad sees this.
ImageSharon
Apr 11, 2011 9:44 PM CST
Name: Sharon
Kentucky
Send him a link.

That is a beautiful child.
Imagedahlianut
Apr 12, 2011 8:45 AM CST
Name: Dahlianut
Calgary, AB Zone 3a
That is exactly perfectly it Shar Lovey dubby
ImageSharon
Apr 12, 2011 8:56 AM CST
Name: Sharon
Kentucky
Would be fun to hear it from another angle, a different reaction.
JuneBug
Apr 13, 2011 5:42 PM CST
Name: June or Nancy☺
Dover AFB, Delaware
My initial thoughts on the first picture were colored by my raising alongside precocious kinfolk; as only a precocious kid could sit and ponder the Three Graces. I overheard him calmly explaining it to his (normal IQ) Dad who seems to be looking hard at the sculpture; as if he doesn't quite 'get it' yet.
The subsequent pictures 'normalized' the kid for me and their story changed to a day of fun in the sun: more felt than remembered in such a little tyke.
It depends on your perspective *Blush*
Imagenap
Apr 13, 2011 5:54 PM CST
Name: Nancy
Buffalo NY
I see your point, June. I really do. The Dad's hand on the boy's head could be his own attempt at normalizing the boy, to use your perspective. As if to remind him who is the Dad and who is the child. Yes? Or no?
JuneBug
Apr 13, 2011 6:08 PM CST
Name: June or Nancy☺
Dover AFB, Delaware
Funny, but in my family a parental hand on the shoulder or head means to "focus completely on what we are discussing". It is how the normal parents talk to the deaf, hyperactive or genius kids. And yes, it is used to show who is in charge.
Imagethreegardeners
Apr 13, 2011 6:51 PM CST
Name: Lee Anne Stark
Ontario, Canada
Perpetually happy!
*Blush* I figured the dad has his hand on the kids head to protect it from any goose poo... Big Grin
Imagenap
Apr 13, 2011 7:39 PM CST
Name: Nancy
Buffalo NY
Well ....then there's that .... Rolling my eyes.
JuneBug
Apr 13, 2011 7:54 PM CST
Name: June or Nancy☺
Dover AFB, Delaware
Rolling on the floor laughing Yep!

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