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Apr 21, 2011 9:13 AM CST
Name: Rand Lowe
Vista, CA
Philosophy:common sense w/big words
I'm a big fan of using conversation in my writing.

As a "listener" and self described 'not much of a talker' Lee Anne, this may be easier for you than you think.

I'll simply imagine what would be said between two people in the setting and put it to words. Here's an example I used in a story written right here on "Cubits".

Quoting:“Officer Williams….are you officer Williams” asked the obviously scared young man?

“Detective Williams” Chase corrected. “How can I help you?”

“They told me I should talk to you. I’m the one that found that girl this morning.”

“What’s your name son, and which girl are you talking about?”

“Name’s Eli, detective. It’s the girl that got shot this morning, or last night, whatever...... I found her this morning. The lady at the desk said your partner was working the case but since he’s not here, that you could take my story.”

“Sure, I can take your statement. Tell me what you found.”

“Well it’s like I told the cops this morning, I was walking to my job over at the auto parts store. I cut through that alley over behind the movie house and that’s when I seen her. She was just laying there with her head on her purse. I wondered why she picked that spot to lay down. It’s still a little cold in the morning you know, and I couldn’t figure out why she was wearing a short sleeved dress on a morning like this. Then I saw her face and the blood….. and I knew she was dead.” The boy began to shake and tears welled up in his eyes.

Chase walked around his desk and put his arm around the lad. “Just have a seat Eli. Take your time. Would you like a bottle of water?”

“Yessir, thank you officer.”

“Detec….O.K. wait right here for a minute Eli.”


To me, conversations make the story come alive. A narrative is fine to set up a scene, but to really draw the reader into the story and make them feel like they're in the room, I love the use of conversation.

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