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Oct 18, 2011 9:25 PM CST
Name: Sharon
Kentucky
I never answered you, DP. I must have forgotten.

That particular scene you describe was amazingly well written. When the conversation is between two people, you nailed it! There is no need to say who is speaking once the first person is identified.

He said, she said is often distracting to the reader, it's best to let the conversation flow just as you did.

And Zany, it's true, your conversations are getting better, I noticed it in your last story segment. Even so, try it without so many he saids and she saids next time, particularly when it's between two people.

Just let the conversation flow. And with three people, it can often work as well to omit the speaker reference. Often you only need to designate one of them occasionally.

"You are pulling my hair!! Stop it!"

"Am not!"

"Are, too!"

"Am not!"

"That's enough, both of you! Next word outta either mouth and you're grounded!"

See?? In that instance, we all know who's doing the talking.

Too many he saids she saids are superfluous.
Readers are usually pretty smart, they don't need elementary writing.

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